This selection comes from my historical
fiction, Till Dawn Rises, the 3rd book in The Endless Fire Trilogy.
The setting:
A dark
alleyway, deep in the heart of ancient Alexandria
Inside
conspirators and an ambush
Pouring rain
Ó Pure Grace
Marcellus’s foot slipped with a splash
into a puddle and awoke his mind to the street around him. The wind had picked
up and his torch sputtered helplessly in his hand, winking the last of its
strength away in a feeble attempt to outlive the whirling, devilish wind and
rain. The frigid water soaked through the bottom of his sandal and jolted to
the bones. Everything was wet, slick, grimy. Rivers of rain cascaded over him,
running in jets down his arms and dripping from his hair. He glanced down,
watching the water streaming through the street and plink upon the cobblestones
as it poured from the sky.
A startled cry from Claudia beside him
caused him to whirl. There, the first step had begun. Merci stood, wreathed in
torchlight, at the end of the street, like a beckoning angel in the midst of
the tempest.
Claudia broke away from his side,
slipping in the rain, trying to run, her arms stretched toward Merci. He had to
stop her. He couldn’t let this happen. The pieces were falling into place. But
not for Gauis.
Aelia gripped his elbow and the electric
touch of her cold hand stimulated his senses.
“Nay, Claudia, stop!” he shouted. The
rebellious wind blew his words back into his mouth as it struck the rain into
his eyes and nose. But it was time he made things right. Before he could think
twice, he sprinted after her. There were many things he had done in his
lifetime, and he was proud of none of them. They flashed across his mind,
pictures, snippets of memory, things he would have liked to have forgotten,
blood screaming on his hands. He had to fix it, once and for all.
Dropping the dead torch, he concentrated
on the world before him. Claudia raced toward Merci, oblivious of the biting
cold and fierce wind. The girl still stood calmly in the shielding alcove, her
face emotionless, eyes as old and blank as the first moment he had seen her.
Marcellus knew Aulus’s dagger pierced her back, a deadly reminder for her to
stay still, to say nothing. And Gauis, the instigator, the monster, lurked in
the shadows behind her, waiting to snatch Claudia the moment she reached her
wayward Merci, to cart her away and finish her. And it was all his doing.
Eeeeee, tense moment there! Gah, and you torture us with not knowing what happens next too. You evil creature.
ReplyDeleteI knew I liked you ;)
Love the description of the rain - I'm feeling rather wet and miserable just reading it!
Haha!! That's the plan.... :D Why, thank you.
DeleteYay. Oh, wait, no. Go get yourself a towel!
Very tense, and I'm so glad I'm not that guy. Sounds like he is going to have a lot of explaining to do.
ReplyDeleteYou know it!
DeleteOh My, this is scary and tense. What happens next?
ReplyDeleteYou'll have to wait and see... :D
DeleteWOW. I have a horrible feeling about what happens next, and gosh, that Gauis is awful. Horrible. Like, ouch, somebody hit him for me?! This is really good. Really. I'm in the moment when I'm reading it.
ReplyDeleteHaha. Hmmm, I wonder why. :D Thanks! I'm so glad!
DeleteThe tension was really obvious! With the amount of characters introduced in such a short time, it took me a minute to orient them all in my head, but once I did I could see it clearly.
ReplyDeleteYeah, thanks! It was kind of hard, because I was worried about all those characters since no one understands what's going on. But I'm glad it worked!
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