This week, Write on Edge did a prompt with this picture.
Using your imagination, you are supposed to do a fictional piece telling the story behind it.
Title: The Red Room
Ó Pure Grace
The wobble of the submarine disorients me. Noises explode
around me as the engines kick into full throttle. Power rushes over the
machinery. I feel unsteady ~ really, unready.
A hand touches my shoulder and I whip around. “What?” I
shout explosively at the white-clad sailor.
“We ~ er ~ just wanted to notify you that all is in
readiness and we await your signal.”
“Then await it!”
He nods and scurries out of my view, casting a puzzled
look back at me. I hope he couldn’t see the sweat beaded on my forehead. I have
never been given such an important assignment before. If I fail, I may as well
surrender my sub to the enemy. There is no getting out if the enemy survives.
Mission: blow up the naval base. Objective: get out
alive.
I close my eyes and see the Admiral in front of me,
clapping me on the shoulder, congratulating me for securing the order, shaking
my hand. Is that sincerity in his eyes? Or malicious fraud? Why would he pick
me, untrained, untried, to carry out this mission. He hated my grandfather. He
hated my father. He hated their success and heroism. What is to keep him from
hating me?
Colors burn in my eyes, kaleidoscope across the room so I
can’t distinguish anything, and, slowly, twist and fuse into one solid theme.
Red. Red like blood.
The white tubes of the missiles gradually form out of the
red haze, beckoning, silent, but clear. Determination settles over me. Let’s do
this.
I give the signal.
Powerful! What a story you are building here! I love the generational conflict. Is you narrator a woman? I pictured a woman as I read...
ReplyDeleteFavorite line: “Then await it!”
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Thanks so much!! It is a young man, but I never clarified, so that was my bad! Appreciate the comment!!! :D
DeleteLoved this! I had a similar vision, when I excused the stockings from the picture.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Thanks!
DeleteThe tension is great.
ReplyDeleteThank you!!
DeleteLoved it! I saw the prompt and opted quietly out, but I liked how you used it. Submarines are cool.
ReplyDeleteHaha!!! Thank you! Yeah, I love them! ;)
Delete"Colors burn in my eyes, kaleidoscope across the room so I can’t distinguish anything, and, slowly, twist and fuse into one solid theme. " I absolutely love this line. So very vivid! I want to know what happens!
ReplyDeleteAw, thank you so much! I rather liked that line myself. :D
DeleteLOVE LOVE LOVE! I am picturing the narrator to be a woman, and can feel her fear, her excitement and her adrenaline going on over drive. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThat makes me so excited! Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteThis is really interesting, a great spin on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you!! :D
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